Rough and Tumble Rumble

[mojopogo]

XTV returns from break to JR and Heyman bickering once more.....

JR: Welcome back folks, if you've just tuned in, its been a helluva show so far.

Heyman: You, know, for once, I have to agree with you, i just wish you ditch the old timer routine.

JR: Oh hush, Paul, I wont apologise for getting a little carried away sometimes, but we're priveliged to be able to say we get paid to watch such a high quality product.

Heyman: Sheesh, begrudingly, i cant disagree there. Now, I believe we have the "beautiful" Lindy Rose out for an interview with our resident ladies man Todd Grisham tonight, can we go backstage?

Sure enough, the camera homes in to the corridor between the car park and the dressing room. Lindy Rose lumbers in, apparently eating a kebab........she looks at her watch and realises she should be on screen in a moment.

Lindy: Oh shi......... she stumbles, and chokes, spitting a mouthful of kebab all over a thoroughly pissed Alexis, who has just emerged from the changing room.

Lindy looks chastened.

Lindy: Sorry pet! Ah, divvent mean t'spit ma kebab over yaz!

Alexis slowly wipes the mess from her expensive jacket.......lip curling into a snarl.........

Alexis: Idiot! Neanderthal! Watch where you're going will you?

Lindy: Alreet, nae need to get ya panties in a bunch lass.....

Alexis hisses and shoves Lindy back..........

Lindy: ya kna, Ah waz gonna let yer off light, with ya being a newbie an aal that, but................f*** it, ahm gonna teach to respect yer elders and betters.......

Lindy without warning, and with surprising speed for a women of her size and age, spears Alexis against the wall, the two woman tumble to the ground, shrieking and cursing.....

JR: Bah gawd! Get security, we got ourselves an all out brawl in the locker room!!!! This could get bowling shoe ugly!!!!!

Heyman: Security? Yeah right! Get some mud or chocolate pudding i say.. No wait, Lindy will eat the pudding.......

Lindy is atop Alexis swinging lefts and right, unsubtle in technique, but with much brute force......She gets a couple of stiff lefts in as Alexis tried to fend off the much heavier woman, struggling until she can finally block and roll her off, the two leap to their feet, fists raised....

Alexis: Pfft, ok, you can be the first of my many, many conquests, you, you........aberration......

Lindy: Ah, can it, you stuck up cow, just bring it on.........

And with that the two women lay into each other with a flurry of punches and kicks, mostly blocked, Lindy does get the upper hand, grabbing her quarry by the hair and hauling her towards the fire escape, looking to ram her head into the firehose.....she thrusts alexis head towards the metal hosereel......blocked! Alexis responds with a stiff back elbow, forcing Lindy to relinquish her grip....

JR: Ladies and gentlemen! Who knows where this is headed? This is a knock down, drag out brawl of the highest order folks, it aint pretty, it aint technical, its two woman knocking seven bells out of each other.

Heyman: I want a front row seat! Ah, takes me right back to.......

Meanwhile, Alexis now has Lindy in a side headlock, raining punches on her head, she irish whips the geordie powerhouse through the fire exit, she sprawls on the concrete in the merchandising area, lindy curses, but quickly springs to her feet ready for her opponent.......

Alexis storms through the door intent on finishing
lindy, she swings for a big clothesline, but Lindy ducks....DDT! on the concrete!!!!!

JR: Bah gawd, bah gawd! A ddt on the concrete!!!!!! That has GOT to be the end of it......

Heyman: Can we say OUCH! This isnt what we'd normally expect from our ladies.......i LOVE IT!!!! he grins.

JR: How can you smile like that? Thats a girl's career right there! She's only just arrived.........

Lindy stands over the fallen Alexis.

Lindy: Ye couldna let it lie, could ya? Well, that'll teach you, you mouthy, ignorant, ungrateful bint! Oh, this ISNT over........she shouts, backing away initially, then realising she should have been in the arena 20 minutes ago for a promo, she bolts back through the fire doors towards the ring.....

JR: CAN SOMEONE CALL THE MEDICAL TEAM? For the love of god......

Heyman: Im thinking Chang just got a mouthful of cold, hard, respect your elder justice..........he chuckles.

Incredibly the camera catches alexis slowly getting to her feet......she's busted wide open from the impact, but the initial dazed look, soon turns to an intense, rage filled stare, as she wipes some blood from the cut.

Predictably too late, the EMT's arrive on the scene with sponges, and equipment to treat Alexis, she refuses treatment, instead her stare has become something of a knowing look, and and she nods her head, perhaps acknowledging the size of the task ahead of her. And turns to head off..........the camera focusses initially on the bemused medics, and switches back to JR and Heyman......

JR: Well, i gotta say, she is one tough sonova.......

Heyman, interrupting JR: Dont you mean daughter of?

JR: Ahem, anyway folks, that was a hell of a way to return from the break, and now, we have the Geordie Good Time Gal, Lindy Rose here for a somewhat delayed interview.......

The camera focusses back on the ramp as Girls Just Wanna Have Fun blasts out...........

[Megz]

lol, great stuff Mojo. Darkie doesn;t actually write Lindy with a strong geordie accent but reading this I wish he would!

Very happy to have you move onto the last task. Give me a quick match between Alexis and Cari-Dee, I'd like you to play it as the nice david and goliath contest it should be with Cari able to capitalise on her quickness to get the win.

[mojopogo]

Thanks Omega! This is working out better than i could have hoped. I shall endeavour to have it done by tomorrow evening. DEFINITELY by the weekend.

[Sparrow]

More of the same with the full stops but as you said you are going to try and cut down on doing it which is good news. Capital I when it is on it's own, obviously you have said about the problems you have, so this feedback is not me trying to pressure you in to doing it right, just trying to help man. Lindy eating a kebab, I laughed at that, yeah more description right after a sentence, just make it a new line. So it reads.

'Lindy: Oh shi...

She stumbles, and chokes, spitting a mouthful of kebab all over a thoroughly pissed Alexis, who has just emerged from the changing room. Lindy looks chastened.

Lindy: Sorry pet! Ah, divvent mean t'spit ma kebab over yaz!'

It looks neater and easier to read. Now on to something amazing in this promo, the way you made Lindy speak, obviously she don't speak with that accent on the main board so watch out when you go over there, you may step on some people's toes but it was so funny to read, I could not stop laughing when I read her first line. This is a really good piece of work, as I read though I find it hard to believe that this is only your second piece ever. Alexis should have been dominate because of the sheer power and dominance of her but other then that and the mistake that are recurring, you are defiantly improving with each work you put out and I can't wait to see you on the main roster. Good brawl, great character. Good luck with the match, look forward to reading it.

[mojopogo]

Thanks very much Sparrow, i do value feedback from vets, and i will work on my structuring and descriptional skills. im still buzzing from starting, so quite often im getting ideas AS im still smoothing over the last one!!!!

[Megz]

Spaz, it is Lindy we're talking about here. She's probably the only woman on the roster who could mix it strength wise with Alexis.

[Sparrow]

Yeah you are right. I would have thought it would have been more surprising if Alexis just dominated, something you don't see happening to Lindy much is some one actually being stronger then her.

[Megz]

funny, I think it more surprising that the normal passive Lindy showed she can;t be pushed around by soemone just because they are string.

[Darkstar]

String. Brilliant.

[Megz]

oh Shet up....

[mojopogo]

I thought, out of respect for my elders (cough), that I should put Lindy over in the brawl. She seems like a hardass, and hopefully thats what came across. She's probably the one woman Alexis couldnt just (wo)manhandle.